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Maycomb on fire! 

The house of an old Lady burned last night

Last night , approximely at 11 o' clock, the house of an old lady named Maudie got burned. Fortunately nobody was hurt and the fire truck arrived as quickly as possible. The fireman still don't know the cause of home fire, they said it could be because of neglect Miss Maudie's or it could be because external factors, this means a bonfire or something else wasn't well oof and because the wind of this cold winter it lit the flame, but they know that nothing of this was still sure and that they will continue searching.
Not all was bad last night the attitude of he neighbors of Miss Maudie's reflect how emphatic and persevering is the people of this town . They immediately go help to save her furniture. Regrettably Miss Maudie's house burns to the ground and she would have to build a neww house. This morning we had the opportunity of talking with her and she said she was trying to see the good things, she truly didn't like much her old house and now she was planning to build a smaller house with  a bigger garden. This is how people should be as possitive as this old lady who has lost her house and finally this incident leads to a mystery, Arthur Radley, known as "BOO" shows himself in public, be cause of the fire. His act denies some gossips about him, because last night it seems he draped a blanket over a little girl, could he be a bad guy? This probably would make a lot of people change their mind about him.

A)  Quality of idea: 

Considering the level the student is able to convey his message quite adequately. He follows a structure of a "News Report"      (9)

B) Organization:

The student is able to follow a news report structure, the ideas are good and clear, includes the events and conclusion

C) Language:

There is some grammar mistakes and punctuation mistakes but I still the idea.